A CRAZY PLANET WAR STORY
Romans
Marco: Julio
Cesar: Mauricio
Augusto: Chema
Octavio: Saul
Maximo: Angel
Greeks
Aquiles: Daniel
Ulises: Leonardo
Nestor: Alan
Laertes: Hector
Etruscans
Casia: Dany
Cecilia: Sofy
Tita: Xime
Hersilia: Luz
Semia: Diana
Sometime ago in a
parallel universe a group of Romans were talking.
Maximo: I am bored,
what can we do?
Cesar: We can go to
see the gladiators.
Augusto: I like going
to the Coliseum.
Marco: No Augusto, I
am sick of watching that slaves fighting each other.
Cesar: Today it would
be Christians versus lions!
Maximo: That is not
interesting we already know who would be the winner.
(Musical number: Jesus Christ Super Star soundtrack)
Octavio: We should
see what is happening in other worlds.
Augusto: Yes, Octavio
is right; we should travel with the galactic bridge to other planets.
Marco: Let’s step in
and see where it takes us.
They used the bridge
and arrive to the planet of the hockey.
Cesar: What is this
place?
Octavio: All these
people are crazy!
Maximo: What is that
game that they are playing?
Augusto: I don’t
know, we should go somewhere else.
They traveled in the
bridge again and this time they arrived to the planet of the Greeks
Aquiles: Welcome to
planet Greece.
(Musical number: Zorba
dance)
Augusto: We should
conquer this place after all we are warriors
Marco: Not only
warriors, we are the best of the best in the war.
Cesar: Yes, our
people had conquered many other civilizations.
Octavio: We should
destroy this civilization.
Nestor: What?! No! You
can’t destroy us!
Augusto: And why not?
Aquiles: Because we
have awesome theater writers like Sophocles that have invented tragedies and
comedies, you would really enjoy watching them.
Ulises: Yes, we made
the best sculptures, and we also paint pottery.
Nestor: And you copy
all from us.
Cesar: You are lying.
Ulises: NO! he is
telling the truth, you have our same gods, and your sculptures are exactly the
same we did.
Laertes: And we are
so intelligent, we also developed philosophy, medicine, democracy…
Marco: Yes but all
that intelligence won’t help you to stop us of conquering you.
Nestor: He is
probably right, we will need some help. Laertes, go for the Etruscans.
(Musical number:
Etruscan dance)
Octavio: Who are you?
Casia: We are
Etruscan women; in our culture women are as important as men.
Cesar: What?! Are the
men in your culture insane?
Cecilia: Our men are
more intelligent and they know they can’t do anything without us.
Marco: And why are
you here?
Hersilia: Our
ancestors the Villanovans trade their products with the Greeks and the
Phoenicians.
Cecilia: Our ancestors
began doing things the way the Greeks and the Phoenicians did them.
Tita: When they
change their traditions they started to be called Etruscans.
Semia: Some of our
people helped building planet Rome so we are your ancestors.
Aquiles: That is why
we called them.
Nestor: Yes to help
us making you understand that we are all connected.
Ulises: And you can’t
destroy us because you will be destroying part of you.
Maximo: OK you
convinced us, we will go.
Marco: Really!! We
are going to surrender like that?
Maximo: Of course not
Augusto: So why did
you say that?
Maximo: Because is a
trap. Follow me.
The romans are the
Etruscans are talking
Tita: We use painting
and dance in our religious rituals.
Hersilia: We love to
dance.
Aquiles: What about sculpture?
Do you do that too?
Semia: Our people
works the bronze very good, they do human figures and other things with it.
Casia: The romans are
back.
Laertes: What are you
doing here?
Octavio: We came back
to give you a present.
Semia: I don’t trust you.
Octavio: It is
understandable, but please accept our gift as a sign of peace.
Hersilia: Everybody
deserves another opportunity.
Tita: Yes don’t be so
rancorous.
Aquiles: I think
Semia is right to be suspicious.
Ulises: Yes if you
think we are going to fall in your trap you don’t know us.
Laertes: It only
proves that our culture has influenced you.
Aquiles: The trick
that you are trying to use was invented by one of our men.
Laertes: Yes, it was
Homer, he wrote it in the Iliad.
Nestor: Now you
should surrender.
Casia: You have no
other option we have you surrounded.
Cecilia: Understand
that you have to respect all the cultures.
Ulises: At the end we
all have something in common.
Tita: No matter if we
have differences we all deserve the same respect.
Casia: And we all can
be friends.
Cecilia: You have to
commit to respect others.
Hersilia: And to give
back the territories you had conquered.
Romans: Yes, we agree.
Casia: In that case
you are free.
Laertes: Go home and
remember your promise.
Saul: But we are not
all about war, fights and deaths.
Julio: No, we also
constructed aqueducts to carry water from long distances.
Hello! It's Becca and Darshan from Ms. Briske's Grade 6 Class! We loved reading your story, A Crazy Planet World Story because it had a very important life lesson about respecting people, even those who are different from you. With us being Canadian, we especially liked the part when they walk into the world of hockey. We thought it was quite amusing! We also liked how they all celebrated at the end! We do have a suggestion: you might want to consider making some of the lines a little bit longer and more complex as a lot of them are quite short and simple, although there are many lines! Aside of our one suggestion your story was extremely interesting and was a great creation. There were many characters and they were all very creatively formed. We really liked all of there unique names. We also learned a lot about Romans, Greeks and Etruscans! Out of curiousity we were wondering if your wonderful story was fictional or non fictional?
ReplyDeleteYours Truly, Becca and Darshan
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ReplyDeleteHello! It's Conner and Bianca from Ms. Briske's grade 6 class. We recently read "A Crazy Planet World Story" and we both loved it! It was sort of 'flattering' because you included Hockey in your story. It was original and there was great vocabulary in your paragraphs! The story was very, very interesting and the characters had amazing lines! We both learned a lot about different cultures! (Romans, Etruscans, Greeks) We have 3 questions for all of you: 1) Did you research about this? 2) Is it an actual event that happened? 3) Do you know what year this event took place? Thank-you and bye!
ReplyDeletehello i am daniel from jules verne school the answers for your questions are
Delete1.we don't research about the story it was invented.
2.no all was invented.
3.in b.c age
Hi, its Hanisha and Aashi
ReplyDeleteWe thought your play was very interesting. The story was quite detailed and well written.
We liked how it was so respectful to woman that they are as important as men. Good job
Your Friends, Aashi and Hanisha
Thank you for all your great comments at the beggining I don't liked it so much but if you like it me too.
ReplyDeleteAlan
Hello! Thanks for your comments! Well this is a fiction story, we invented it. We are glad you like it =D It's funny you like planet hockey, we like it to! And to Aashi and Hanisha I also like the respect for women. Becca and Darshan I also like the life lesson of respecting others =) Conner and Bianca It's a fiction story but we search all the information.
ReplyDeleteYour friend Xime =D
Sorry I made a mistake, it is too instead of the to I wrote. Well again thanks for all your comments! They are beautiful!
ReplyDeleteXime
Hi! It's Dani from Jules Verne School
ReplyDeleteThank you for your comments I saw that you like more the idea of the planet of hockey =D okay that is good and is also my favorite part haha!
For Becca and Darshan this story is fictional
For Conner and Bianca 1) Yes we research information by teams of the Greeks, Etruscans and Romans. 2) no is not an actual event 3) we don't have the year
For Hanisha and Aashi thanks for your comment that was beautiful, that part of.. We are etruscan women in our culture women are as important as men is part of my dialogue :D
Your Friend Dani :)
Thanks for the comments you put about our asambly.
ReplyDeleteI am a roman and the roman history is very interesting.
Mauricio
Hello!!! My name is Sophy... Thanks for the oppinions.... And.... Conner and Bianca.... 1) Yes we research a lot of information.... 2) No it isn't.... 3) Mmmm I think is b.C.
ReplyDeleteMy Favorite part of the play is when all of us dance...
Your friend Sophy Sandoval... (:
Yes all the persons deserve the same respect because all have the same rights.
ReplyDeleteThe hockey planet was my idea. I think that is very asesine that you like my idea because I like the hockey
José María.
Thank you for your comments i like the play but I want more dialogues and remember I am Maximo.
ReplyDeleteYour friend Angel.